I trod the desolated aisle,
I was searching for a glow amidst,
The motionless air,
The aura of timeless despair,
With the perplexity in my mind,
What good in me, the mortals find.
You came, you smiled, and you blossomed,
For me, amongst those in the wreath
Taught me, The Art,
Infused within me,
An elevated confidence.
I yearn to touch you,
While the silkworms envy me,
The thousand miles seemed trivial,
The bonding grew surreal,
Yet you were there,
Holding your sceptre,
Healing me and my issues.
Be my world, for without you,
Rhyme would evade me forever.
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November 3, 2007 at 4:34 pm |
i love it!!!
November 5, 2007 at 2:52 am |
Try 2 keep it simple dude!!
November 5, 2007 at 3:50 am |
very beautiful…creates an aesthetic scene….reading it, somewhere along the lines, i also found it filled with hope and humility…
December 15, 2007 at 1:46 am |
not much of a poetry man… but i like this one!
March 2, 2008 at 9:34 pm |
could be better, i don’t see any poetry anywhere but i sure u can improve well soon
March 5, 2008 at 11:57 pm |
It’s a good poem inspite of what your above critics say. Overall, the blog is pretty good, infact really good.
If you take heed of anonymous comments, then let me give you one – increase the content of humour, maintain a balance between serious stuff and humourous stuff and also poems. It would also be good to hear about your journey to iit, your friends at iit, what you think about friendship at iit, profs, campus, iitg wrt other iits or something in those lines. In the rare case you wish to contact me, leave a message right here.
—from an admirer you never know exists.
November 23, 2009 at 6:36 pm |
still loling@ur lobbymate
the above one is an iit aspirant. wants to know about iit life and which iit is better than which.
November 23, 2009 at 6:39 pm |
well first tale becomes dale, and then thousand miles creep up..
too much of a hint.. i comprehended more than was written.